Hacker Homework Reflection

            The hacker homework assignment was a good exercise to do. Some of the activities were review, and some were new to me.  As I worked through the exercises, my mind began to wonder on past writings I have done. I wondered about what I do wrong without even noticing.  The activities seemed so simple and easy when you just had to pick the correct sentence but when I went to the edit and compare sections they got more challenging. Our group was focused on the section 11-1 and 11-2, mixed construction. Mixed construction is something I have never really heard of before. After the first couple of examples I was about to notice the main theme of mixed construction that is; a sentence that begins with one type of structure and shifts to another type of structure. Some example of mixed construction are: Mixed: Every few hundred feet a test sample of the layer of earth a bit of it is analyzed to determine the distance from oil. Revised: Every few hundred feet a test sample of the layer of earth is analyzed to determine the distance from oil. Mixed: Out in the rain was coming down on the children. Revised: Out in the rain the children were getting wet. Doing this hacker exercise was overall very helpful for me.

20 parameters of "Good writing"

--Grammar and Structure
--Good choice of words but has to make sense
--Transition from one point to another
-- Introduction: Needs to catch your attention and make you want to keep reading to find out what happens.
--Clear and intresting ending
--Creative body could make readers not loose their interests in your story
--Be logical: a story should make sense
--Mystery: don't make the topic be extremely obvious. allow the reader to actually think about it and try to figure things out for themselves.
--Imagination: Being creative makes it more interesting to read, and more engaging.
--Personalized stories with your own words and ideas are more meaningful and interesting
--Creative: Should be something new that makes story more interested and different
--Emotion: The ability to connect to the emotions of what is happening
--Has a good hook in the beginning
--Conclusion that summarizes main points of the story
-- When it is made for the reader to understand. Target audience.
--Using good resources to find legit information.
--Put facts from least to most important.
--Attractive clues that makes you want to read more.
--Pace: How fast the story moves shouldn't be to fast or to slow


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Hacker Review of

E-ex 8-1 Active vs. passive verbs- It was a nice review and refresher, but I understand the difference between active and passive.

E-ex 8-2 Active vs. be verbs- I need a lot of work on Active vs be verbs. I had a hard time telling the difference.

E-ex 8-3 Active verbs -A good test of your skills but I had and easy time switching them.

E-ex 9-1 Parallelism- That is something I never realized that I do.

E-ex 9-2 Parallelism- Same as 9-1

E-ex 9-3 Parallelism- After the first two reviews changing them wasn't hard. 

E-ex 10-1 Needed words- it is easy to read the sentence to see it the word is needed or not.

E-ex 10-2 Needed words- It was hard for me to find the mistake and fix the sentence.

E-ex 11-1 Mixed constructions- It was easy when you read the sentence out loud.

E-ex 11-2 Mixed constructions-  Same as 11-1

E-ex 12-1 Misplaced modifiers-This one was good for me because it is something I do without noticing. 

E-ex 12-2 Misplaced modifiers-  It was hard to correct the sentences correctly.

E-ex 12-3 Dangling modifiers-It was hard to tell the difference between the right and wrong sentence.

E-ex 12-4 Dangling modifiers- It showed me that modifiers is something I really need to work on.

E-ex 13-1 Shifts: person and number- Easy pick up but can go unnoticed easily.

E-ex 13-2 Shifts: tense-Same as 13-1.

E-ex 13-3 Shifts-Same as 13-1

E-ex 13-4 Shifts- Nice to review what you just learned and put it to use.

E-ex 14-1 Choppy sentences- Tough for me to tell the difference between the correct and not correct sentence.

E-ex 14-2 Choppy sentences-  Something I also need to work on.

E-ex 14-3 Subordination- Easy to understand as the examples went on.

Top Three

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Mixed Construction

Mixed construction- sentence that begins with one type of structure and shifts to another type of structure.

Examples:  Mixed: Take, for example, in the strip mines of southeastern Ohio, the blaster has one of the best-paying jobs.

                  Revised: For example, in the strip mines of southeastern Ohio, the blaster has one of the best paying jobs.

                       Mixed: Every few hundred feet a test sample of the layer of earth a bit of it is analyzed to determine the distance from oil.

                  Revised: Every few hundred feet a test sample of the layer of earth is analyzed to determine the distance from oil.

                  Mixed: Out in the rain was coming down on the children.

                  Revised: Out in the rain the children were getting wet.

Good Story

1.Organized
2.Grammar and Structure
3.Interesting to reader
4.Clear details
5.Descriptive words
6.Creative
7.Inspiration
8.Focused on the topic
9.Suspenseful
10.Positive attitude
11.Good dialog
12.Personalized
13.Educational
14.Easy to understand
15.Good content
16.Good development

Story-in-a-Box

On first look at all the items in the box I wanted to find a creative way get them all together in some creative way. Then when you simplify the items and look at the big picture the items in the box are closer then on first glance. The items are all unique and different and the theme of the box makes it more like life. Growing up we are sheltered, our parents control what we do, what we wear, what we see, and even what we eat. The box represents the shelter we are put into. The cardboard box that the items we were put into is like our parents shelter. Eventually it will break down and we will become more independent and on our own. When that happens you get to see things and people you have never seen before from places you have never heard of all around the world. Not one of the items was the same they all had there own original design and looked to be hand made. The majority of the items were from all different places as well. The rule can represent America sense Americans are the only place where the metric system is not used.   The canoe to me represents the Native American people. There was a Finka in the box, which is a Spanish home. Also there looked to be a wallet and some coins from an Asian country. And the black statue looked to be from an African Country. From my guess the whole world was just about covered, but then when I was looking around campus today I realized there are many people on campus that might not be from here. Then looking back on the items and comparing them to people I got to thinking each one of those items has there own story on how or why they were created and what the meaning is behind them. People are very much the same way. Every one has their own story on who they are. That is even what our first assignment was. We talked about who we are and how people would describe themselves. Every one has their own story to tell.

inventory

1. Canoe- little in size but resembles travel and movement of people.*

2. Head- no hair but look like a female

3. Ruler- used to measure

4. Chestnuts- food and decoration

5. Blanket- warmth and shelter &

6. Drummer- many colors, scarf winter time, persistent

7. Wallet- Chinese design, storage #

8. Coin Collection- shows history and dedication #

9. Jar- tiny, cork topper, storage #

10. Stamper- letters/ seals things *

11. Finka- Spanish house. protection, comfort &

12. Black Statue- decorative/ proud to be where she is from

What do people answer when they are asked, "who am I?"

When people are asked the question "Who am I?" there are a variety of different answers. Everything from where you started to where you want to end. In my opinion I think it is more important to focus on the past more then the future. The past is what makes you who you are. You learn from mistakes and successes. That is what makes you who you are. Your family and the environment that you grew up in and all the back ground information is what makes you you. To me the future shapes you in some way but doesn't have as large of an impact on you. Goals and dreams are always changing as you grow. When you are asked to describe yourself or who you are you don't say I'm going to be a firefighter or the president. You tell them more about your past experiences. From the note cards it seemed to be half past and half future.